All Dem Sea-Witches

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All Dem Sea-Witches

You’re sinking again, you’re sinking again; a lonely water void.

Well, what would you prefer? An ugly pain; a pretty one?

Shush, both of you, and do as you are told.

 

Within a crowd of weaklings, how every king is bold.

Oh, sweetness of my Heart? What have you done?

You’re sinking again, you’re sinking again; a lonely water void.

 

To swallow up an ocean, kiss its brow when nice and cold.

Must we but never, never ever have fun?

Shush, both of you, and do as you are told!

 

I want you with an ache, a bluest cloud unfolds.

Bewitch the enchanter and the shoreline is won.

You’re sinking again, you’re sinking again; a lonely water void.

 

Quickly, brew up storms, all cartography? Destroy!

But, Father of Tideways, I am not your son!

Shush, both of you, and do as you are told!

 

This naivety of yours will wake me rapid, sad and old.

The seagulls, like love, will circle on and on.

You’re sinking again, you’re sinking again; a lonely water void.

Shush, both of you, and do as you are told!

*For NaPo day 5, where the task is the always beloved to tackle villanelle. My entry today is imagined as a sort of Shakespearean scene, where three witches are trapped atop a boat in the middle of the storm, and, in that moment, are trying to converse their minds out to try and pass the time.

This poem, although it looks how it looks and seems quite like jibberish, was partially brought into the light of my pen while listening to one of my favourite music albums from last year, so I am leaving you a link to it, if you feel inclined and/or curious to listen.

The poem accompanying artwork is the album’s cover. The NaPo inspiration material, is the first sentence of my poem, which are the lyrics to the album’s song “Vero”

 

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~ by Oloriel on April 5, 2019.

37 Responses to “All Dem Sea-Witches”

  1. I’m so confused looking at your archives to the side because I thought that you had stopped blogging but clearly I must have accidentally unfollowed you. What a travesty.

    • I remember you and your blog from years ago, that you always had a very strong impact, compassionate and loving voice. I have thought likewise that you have stopped writing so I was very glad when I saw a post from you in my Reader 🙂

  2. I can see the three witches in this poem.

  3. Witches, witches, aleays sinking – a fascinating poem the I do not understsnd, but enjoyed reading…

  4. Well done!

  5. This has a great flow and mystery to it….the “Shush” line is a perfect bookend …..(ps, i never look too closely for meaning in a poem, I just go with the images and the sound!) …well done! JIM

    • Thank you very much for reading and leaving me a word of your own. Not searching for meanings was exactly what I intended; more so just reading, usong imagination and creating the meaning yourself, if ypu so please, so reading your comment makes me feel pretty content!

  6. Love the storytelling in villanelle form. I can imagine the repetitive lines being said by the witches:

    You’re sinking again, you’re sinking again; a lonely water void.
    Shush, both of you, and do as you are told!

    Thanks for joining our Villanelle poetry form challenge.

  7. Good use of villanelle and its repeating lines! Glad you gave a bit of back story too.

  8. They do seem to be a loony trio.

  9. This is eerie but I loved it. The rhythm and repetition seem to create the waves, bringing the words to life….especially with “You’re sinking again, you’re sinking again; a lonely water void.”

  10. you painted the scene vividly. hands down!

  11. I enjoyed the witchy conversation under duress! (Though was glad you explained.)

    • Thank you very much for reading, and I am happy to hear the explanation was welcome. Often, people complain to me when I try to elaborate on my poems 🙂

  12. That’s a crazy good villanelle, Oloriel! The “sinking again” refrain in particular makes it sound like an old song and sets the scene in all its elements and theatrics. I love this bit: “I want you with an ache, a bluest cloud unfolds./Bewitch the enchanter and the shoreline is won.”

    • Thank you very much for your kind words, HA, means a lot to me! Do listen to the album when and if you have the will or chance 😦

  13. Nice line: “Within a crowd of weaklings, how every king is bold.”

  14. There are some beautiful lines in here – I love the voices of the witches, and the storm imagery. I like “The seagulls, like love, will circle on and on” – such a great image.

    • Thank you very much, I am glad you enjoyed reading and thank you for letting me know which stanza stood out to you the most, I really appreciate it!

  15. This poem was a surprise and a nice one too. I also enjoyed the back story – it helped to picture the three witches dithering on the waves, bickering among themselves while wishing for a shoreline that seemed far off. The seriousness of their situation is set by the repeating lines.

    • Sorry for the late reply, for some reason this ended in my spam folder. Thank you very much for reading and taking the time to let me know what it made you think of or feel.

  16. great stuff, thanks for sharing.
    please check out the art/music blog.
    https://thehighsnlows.com

    Lo. x

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